Would it be inappropriate to write about my romance novel for my college essay?

I agree with S.K. Plus, most people reading this are automatically going to think of the 'Twilight' series simply because of the similarity in the character names and because it appears to be about forbidden love. That instant connection, fair or not, will connect a college essay to a young adult novel, and the writer of that college essay to a much younger girl. There are so many basic writing problems here that I would suggest having someone edit this for you long before you make any attempts to use it for anything other than your own enjoyment. S.K. listed some, but as a specific example, most people can't sob and speak at the same time. You would write that part with a simple 'she said' dialog tag, and then show her sobbing through body language and interaction with the character. This isn't to say don't write, just that you don't appear to be ready to submit to a college for something as important as an essay. Keep writing, having fun with your story, and learning the craft, but find something else for your college essay. Good luck.