Can you comment on my poem?

Hmmmm. starts with an archaic word Cherub, goes on like ultra modern rap with the repetition of ity type ending. Then goes archaic again with arcadia, then uses panacea with which I can find no rhyme, then misspells Eden, then goes vaguely Disney with never never land, then ancient again with thy (what's wrong with "your" hands instead?) This needs some consistency. Get all the ancient stuff out of it and write like today.